[讨论]大家来讨论以下这段黑蔷薇保存会的介绍的英文翻译吧

就是以下这段喵，也欢迎大家往里面补充内容喵：

黑蔷薇保存会是由声优堀江由衣所组建的一个视觉系音乐组合，来自堀江由衣的广播节目“堀江由衣的天使蛋”。其成员均为该广播节目的工作人员。目前该组合的人员组成为：Vocal:ユイエル(堀江由衣)；Bass:エルエル；Guitar: OYKT；Chorus & 言葉責め:ゼメエル；Angel Dance:Ma様。目前该组合自从C71的CD出道以来，一共发行了2张CD（「飛べない天使」与「花火」）和1张DVD（「BLUE HEAVEN」）

官方网站：http://www.starchild.co.jp/artist/horie/radio/kurobara/top.html

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（翻译原件来自[堀江家的奴隸]，以下为偶修改过的决定稿）

The "Kurobara hozonkai (黒薔薇保存会, the Black-Rose-Saving Association)" is a visual music group led and formed by voice actress (声優, seiyuu) Yui Horie (堀江由衣), and it's came from the radio programme "Horie Yui no Tenshi no Tamago (堀江由衣の天使のたまご, Horie Yui’s Angel Eggs)" of Yui Horie.
All the members of the group are the staff of this radio programme.
The members of the band are: Vocal "Yuieru (ユイエル) (Yui Horie)”, Bass "Erueru (エルエル)", Guitar "OYKT", Chorus and Kotobazeme "Zemeeru (ゼメエル)", and Angel Dance "Ma sama".
And since their first show-up in Comic market 71, there were now two CDs, "Tobenai Tenshi (飛べない天使, The angel that can't get flying)” and "Hanabi (花火, Firework)” and one DVD "BLUE HEAVEN" released.

For more reference please refer to :
http://www.starchild.co.jp/artist/horie/radio/kurobara/top.html

"Kurobara hozonkai" is a visual music group led and formed by Yui Horie, and it's came from the radio programme " Tenshi no Tamago" of Yui Horie. All the members of the are the staff of the radio programme.
The members of the band are Vocal "Yuieru" Yui Horie, Bass "Erueru", Guitar "OYKT", Chorus and (我不會) "Zemeeru", Angel Dance "Ma sama".
Since their first show up in C71, there were now 2CD "Tobenai no Tenshi" ( The angel that can't fly) and "Hanabi" ( Firework) and 1DVD "Blue Heaven" released.

For more reference please refer to :
http://www.starchild.co.jp/artist/horie/radio/kurobara/top.html

兩張single的名字是我惡搞的
翻譯也是隨便來的XD

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引用第1楼堀江家的奴隸于2007-08-31 23:58发表的  :
"Kurobara hozonkai" is a visual music group led and formed by Yui Horie, and it's came from the radio programme " Tenshi no Tamago" of Yui Horie. All the members of the are the staff of the radio programme.
The members of the band are Vocal "Yuieru" Yui Horie, Bass "Erueru", Guitar "OYKT", Chorus and (我不會) "Zemeeru", Angel Dance "Ma sama".
Since their first show up in C71, there were now 2CD "Tobenai no Tenshi" ( The angel that can't fly) and "Hanabi" ( Firework) and 1DVD "Blue Heaven" released.

For more reference please refer to :
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谢谢喵

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引用第2楼shanbentai于2007-08-31 23:59发表的  :

谢谢喵

山貓先檢查一下啊XD

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引用第3楼堀江家的奴隸于2007-09-01 00:01发表的  :

山貓先檢查一下啊XD

偶已经修改过了，以下为完成稿，不知你觉得如何：

The "Kurobara hozonkai (黒薔薇保存会, the Black-Rose-Saving Association)" is a visual music group led and formed by voice actress (声優, seiyuu) Yui Horie (堀江由衣), and it's came from the radio programme "Horie Yui no Tenshi no Tamago (堀江由衣の天使のたまご, Horie Yui’s Angel Eggs)" of Yui Horie.
All the members of the group are the staff of this radio programme.
The members of the band are: Vocal "Yuieru (ユイエル) (Yui Horie)”, Bass "Erueru (エルエル)", Guitar "OYKT", Chorus and Kotobazeme "Zemeeru (ゼメエル)", and Angel Dance "Ma sama".
And since their first show-up in Comic market 71, there were now two CDs, "Tobenai Tenshi (飛べない天使, The angel that can't get flying)” and "Hanabi (花火, Firework)” and one DVD "BLUE HEAVEN" get released.

For more reference please refer to :
http://www.starchild.co.jp/artist/horie/radio/kurobara/top.html

released 是past participle, 形容詞
後面那句there were now two CDs and one DVD "BLUE HEAVEN" get released
會變成一句句字有兩個動詞( were 跟get)
那樣不就糟糕了嗎orz

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引用第5楼堀江家的奴隸于2007-09-01 00:30发表的  :
released 是past participle, 形容詞
後面那句there were now two CDs and one DVD "BLUE HEAVEN" get released
會變成一句句字有兩個動詞( were 跟get)
那樣不就糟糕了嗎orz

对哦……那怎么修改比较好呢喵？

就直接把get刪去

接上released就可以了

2cds and 1 Dvd released. 文法絕不會有錯
表達的意思就是" 已發行了的有兩隻cd跟一隻dvd"

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引用第7楼堀江家的奴隸于2007-09-01 00:41发表的  :
就直接把get刪去

接上released就可以了

2cds and 1 Dvd released. 文法絕不會有錯
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哦~~~原来如此……谢谢喵

原来黑蔷薇保存会这样来...